That could be interesting....
Aug. 27th, 2009 05:21 pmDear author. Your story sounded interesting. A new (to me) twist on the old gender-swap thing. I don't normally read gender-swap stuff, but this sounded sufficiently interesting enough for me to give it a chance. The header information all appeared to be grammatically correct and spelled properly. So, clicky I go.
However, I had to stop just into the second chapter when you had one character, who owns his own business, getting ready to go to a "chair holders" meeting. Ummm..... I don't quite think that's what you were going for.
How would a chair holders meeting work, anyway? Everyone shows up and "I've got my chair." "Here's mine." "Great. Meeting adjourned." I don't know...
However, I had to stop just into the second chapter when you had one character, who owns his own business, getting ready to go to a "chair holders" meeting. Ummm..... I don't quite think that's what you were going for.
How would a chair holders meeting work, anyway? Everyone shows up and "I've got my chair." "Here's mine." "Great. Meeting adjourned." I don't know...